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| + | moved a paragraph, cleaned up some verbose language. the captain future quote doesn't have a beginning quotation mark, need to figure that out. if the entire sentence is a quote than we might need to add a sentence or two to make the paragraph more substantial. | ||
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| + | The animal cyborg for therapy section is iffy, given that these aren't really cyborgs at all (no organic components). either give a serious qualifier about how this isn't really a cyborg or move this section of the article to a different article (affective computing, haptics?) | ||
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| + | The concept is important, but the article is iffy. this section in particular: | ||
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| + | A social network with a high potential of connectivity does not automatically guarantee it. All life is mystery meat navigation. All clicks unwrap presents. We can’t see what is on the other side, but we want to get there. We are great unknowing youth. If we really knew what was on the other side we would never consume or love like we do. We would despair. Instead, we are kings, kings that reign for only a little while before being enslaved and tortured to death by endless lines, airport travel, traffic jams, physical and mental isolation, elevator music, and boring architecture. The only way out of this isolation is through reconnecting to culture and community via the iPod, the text message, or the phone call. There is no limitless value, or infinite reproducibility of objects, but rather a limited supply of connectivity. In his Phenomenon of Man, Pierre Teilhard de Chardin wrote that connectivity equals life, and isolation equals death.[3] Being connected is a luxury. | ||
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| + | does social networking increase or decrease anomie? you simultaneously portray this as isolating but also there is the redemption of the cell phone and the ipod. I kind of get where you're coming from, but I think it needs to be concretized more. One of the comments that came very strongly from the professors who I showed parts of the book to was to avoid "McCluenism's" (aka broad general and someone insubstantial characterizations of technology), I think this is one of these articles to which this criticism applies. | ||
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| + | good concept, but need to mention science fiction and fictive worlds in the first paragraph. the science fiction part (which what it really seems to be about) doesn't show up until much later, makes the initial reading a little confusing. | ||
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| + | another paragraph on why this concept is important. we see a rise in asynchronous communication with modernity? in one sense it seems to become more of a feature of modernity, but in another sense it seems to be diminishing (think hand written letters vs. skype). what effect does this have on cohesion? | ||
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| + | the key phrase that is missing here is "law of the conservation of energy". automatic production of space seems to fly right in the face of this basic law of physics. when you access a piece of information on the internet, a copy is saved on your computer with little to no energy expended. one can fit what used to be an entire library in a centimeter. A good word to use here might be "wormhole". an ipod is literally growing in "space" without actually growing in physical space, as if the informational wormhole is deepening. this small article explains the low of conservation in relation to information quite well http://www.jwz.org/doc/iwtbf.html | ||
31 Avatar | 31 Avatar | ||
32 Backspace Generation | 32 Backspace Generation | ||
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| + | there's a real opportunity to talk about typewriters vs. computers and the difference between forming a cohesive thought before writing it. this also touches on a much larger issue of external mind. when we had to write things without a backspace (and on materials that were expensive), we needed to have fully formulated a thought before manifesting it. WIth the backspace and modern word processor (with it's modern editing tools) we can think through writing and easily construct our thoughts visually by cutting pasting and backspacing. think "technologic" by daft punk :-) | ||
34 Bee Dance | 34 Bee Dance | ||
35 Body Optimization | 35 Body Optimization | ||
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| + | article seems a bit out of place thematically. maybe take out? or qualify it with a paragraph on technologies of human enhancement as a key manifestation of our cyborg condition. focus less on specific techniques and more on why body optimization is such an integral part of our futre. | ||
37 Boundary Maintenance | 37 Boundary Maintenance | ||
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| + | The last paragraph is iffy, especially the myspace bit. it's not that clear, I think focusing on the cyborg and the destruction of accepted boundaries is a much better avenue for this concept, since boundary maintance is ACTUALLY I just had a thought, this could be combined with cyborg security with very good results. | ||
39 Brain-Computer Interface | 39 Brain-Computer Interface | ||
40 Calm Computing | 40 Calm Computing | ||
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| + | would add a paragraph about simplicity in deisign and being bombarded by advertisments | ||
42 Celebrity as Cyborg | 42 Celebrity as Cyborg | ||
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| + | good article. would mention twitter and celebrities as the creation of intimacy in the digital space. one can almost feel like they are hanging out with a celeb with twiiter, a very novel turn of events in our worship of celebrities. | ||
43 Chorded Keyboard | 43 Chorded Keyboard | ||
Latest revision as of 21:17, 18 December 2011
1 Introduction
1 A Cyborg Manifesto
Needs to be more nuanced. the manifesto is basically the ur-text of cyborg anthropology, and it deserves a brilliant analysis. need to mention shift to postmodern forms of organization. it would be really good to include the table (modern/postmodern) from the article, since that gives a pretty good overview of what the article is talking about. I can help clean this one up.
9 Actor Network Theory
11 Affective Computing
13 Ambient Awareness
"Future Alex Soojung-Kim Pang" <- is that supposed to be that way? perhaps break up that big quote, or block quote it? confusing whne embedded in paragraph.
"Twitter basically sets new users as default "socially opted out" until they gather content to follow. When they encounter something they don't like, they're free to drop them." this needs to be reworded or deleted (ambiguous pronouns. I'm familiar with twitter and still don't get it)
These next two paragraphs are tricky, see my notes below them:
The paradox and allure of ambient awareness lies in its shape. It's not that we're always connected, but that we have always ability to connect. This is ambient intimacy, where connectivity is only a button away. Where sharing and connecting with another is not defined by geography but technosocial capability. David Weinberger called it "continual partial friendship", and Johnnie Moore pointed out that, "it's not about being poked and prodded, it's about exposing more surface area for others to connect with". Reality theorist Sheldon Renan calls it "Loosely but deeply entangled". Whatever you call it, it is a higher order of connectivity than we've ever experienced before as humans. We are beginning to see a new sense of time - the collective now. What we're really seeing is that everything is a button away. We are mobile, and we need just-in-time information. In our mothers' wombs, all things came to us without us having to go anywhere. It is the same with the smartphone. Even though we move around in time and space, we can increasingly access social and entertainment sentience via a single device. Our devices and surroundings have become a sort of technosocial womb.
NOTES: these two paragraphs have alot of good content but the writing is sub-par (mostly staccato sentences, a serious lack of conjunctions that explain the logical relations of the individual sentences. try adding "although", "and", "however", "despite", subordinate clauses, etc. etc. The staccato sentences can be powerful as punchlines after a series of longer sentences, but if the whole paragraph is made of them they loose their rhetorical force) I've noticed this in other places as well, I'll refer to this here-on-out as "staccato".
missing alot of citations on this article.
15 Android
moved a paragraph, cleaned up some verbose language. the captain future quote doesn't have a beginning quotation mark, need to figure that out. if the entire sentence is a quote than we might need to add a sentence or two to make the paragraph more substantial.
18 Animal Cyborgs
The animal cyborg for therapy section is iffy, given that these aren't really cyborgs at all (no organic components). either give a serious qualifier about how this isn't really a cyborg or move this section of the article to a different article (affective computing, haptics?)
20 Anomie
The concept is important, but the article is iffy. this section in particular:
A social network with a high potential of connectivity does not automatically guarantee it. All life is mystery meat navigation. All clicks unwrap presents. We can’t see what is on the other side, but we want to get there. We are great unknowing youth. If we really knew what was on the other side we would never consume or love like we do. We would despair. Instead, we are kings, kings that reign for only a little while before being enslaved and tortured to death by endless lines, airport travel, traffic jams, physical and mental isolation, elevator music, and boring architecture. The only way out of this isolation is through reconnecting to culture and community via the iPod, the text message, or the phone call. There is no limitless value, or infinite reproducibility of objects, but rather a limited supply of connectivity. In his Phenomenon of Man, Pierre Teilhard de Chardin wrote that connectivity equals life, and isolation equals death.[3] Being connected is a luxury.
does social networking increase or decrease anomie? you simultaneously portray this as isolating but also there is the redemption of the cell phone and the ipod. I kind of get where you're coming from, but I think it needs to be concretized more. One of the comments that came very strongly from the professors who I showed parts of the book to was to avoid "McCluenism's" (aka broad general and someone insubstantial characterizations of technology), I think this is one of these articles to which this criticism applies.
23 Antisocial Networks
Needs a major reworking. I see what is trying to be conveyed, but the concept is not the "opposite of social networking". perhaps a name change? The article seems to actually about social spaces in which feedback loops of social information are not properly functioning. you can stalk someone on facebook without them knowing anything about it, but this one of the brilliant things about facebook. I would call the article "stealth socialization" "social stalking" or something catchy like that. if this doesn't make sense I can probably explain better on skype.
26 Architecture Fiction
good concept, but need to mention science fiction and fictive worlds in the first paragraph. the science fiction part (which what it really seems to be about) doesn't show up until much later, makes the initial reading a little confusing.
27 Asynchronous communication
another paragraph on why this concept is important. we see a rise in asynchronous communication with modernity? in one sense it seems to become more of a feature of modernity, but in another sense it seems to be diminishing (think hand written letters vs. skype). what effect does this have on cohesion?
30 Automatic Production of Space
the key phrase that is missing here is "law of the conservation of energy". automatic production of space seems to fly right in the face of this basic law of physics. when you access a piece of information on the internet, a copy is saved on your computer with little to no energy expended. one can fit what used to be an entire library in a centimeter. A good word to use here might be "wormhole". an ipod is literally growing in "space" without actually growing in physical space, as if the informational wormhole is deepening. this small article explains the low of conservation in relation to information quite well http://www.jwz.org/doc/iwtbf.html
31 Avatar
32 Backspace Generation
there's a real opportunity to talk about typewriters vs. computers and the difference between forming a cohesive thought before writing it. this also touches on a much larger issue of external mind. when we had to write things without a backspace (and on materials that were expensive), we needed to have fully formulated a thought before manifesting it. WIth the backspace and modern word processor (with it's modern editing tools) we can think through writing and easily construct our thoughts visually by cutting pasting and backspacing. think "technologic" by daft punk :-)
34 Bee Dance
35 Body Optimization
article seems a bit out of place thematically. maybe take out? or qualify it with a paragraph on technologies of human enhancement as a key manifestation of our cyborg condition. focus less on specific techniques and more on why body optimization is such an integral part of our futre.
37 Boundary Maintenance
The last paragraph is iffy, especially the myspace bit. it's not that clear, I think focusing on the cyborg and the destruction of accepted boundaries is a much better avenue for this concept, since boundary maintance is ACTUALLY I just had a thought, this could be combined with cyborg security with very good results.
39 Brain-Computer Interface
40 Calm Computing
would add a paragraph about simplicity in deisign and being bombarded by advertisments
42 Celebrity as Cyborg
good article. would mention twitter and celebrities as the creation of intimacy in the digital space. one can almost feel like they are hanging out with a celeb with twiiter, a very novel turn of events in our worship of celebrities.
43 Chorded Keyboard
45 City as Software
47 Collaborative Reality
49 Companion Species
50 Compulsion Loops
51 Cyborg Security
53 Deep Hanging Out
55 Device as Memory
58 Digital Backyard
59 Digital Dark Age
61 Digital Detritus
63 Digital Downtime
64 Digital Ethnography
66 Digital Footprint
68 Digital Hoarding
69 Digital Hygiene
71 Diminished Reality
72 Distributed Cognition
74 Douglas Rushkoff
76 Email Apnea
77 Email apnea
80 Email Sabbatical
83 Equipotential Space
85 Extended Nervous System
87 External Brain
89 Feeling Obligated to stay connected
91 Flaneuring
94 Flow
95 Fractal Aesthetic
97 Fractal Self
99 Future Runoff
100 Future Self
101 Future Shock
102 Geolocation
103 Hacker-as-Hero
105 Haptics
106 Hardware
109 Heavy Modernity
110 Hertzian Space
112 Human Computer Interaction
114 Hyperlinked Memories
115 Hyperpresence
117 Hypersigil
120 Infomorph
122 Information
123 Information Society
127 Infosynaesthesia
128 Interaction Shield
129 Intermittent Reinforcement
130 Interoperability
132 Interstitial Space
134 Junk Sleep
136 Lifecasting
138 Lifelong Kindergarten
140 Lifestreaming
141 Liminal Space
142 Little Brother
144 Location Sharing
145 Low-Tech Cyborgs
146 Machine Learning
147 Macy Meetings
149 Mark Weiser
151 Marshall McLuhan
152 Mediated Reality
154 Mediology
156 Mental Fragmentation
157 Mental Real Estate
161 Micro-Singularity
163 Mild Dystopia
164 Mind Uploading
165 Minimalism
166 Multitasking
167 Mundane Science Fiction
168 Mundane Studies
172 Natural Language Processing
175 Netness
178 Node centrality
181 Non-Place
182 Non-Visual Augmented Reality
183 Ocular Convergence
187 Paracosmic Immersion
189 Path dependence
192 Persistent Architecture
194 Persistent Paleontology
196 Personal Space
197 Plastic Time
200 Presentation of Self in Digital Life
202 Pronoia
203 Prosthetic
205 Prosthetic Culture
207 Protocyborg
209 Proxemics
210 Proximal notification
213 Psyber-culture
214 Psychasthenia
216 Qualitative and Quantitative Analysis
218 Reality Mining
219 Ringxiety
220 Robot
221 Role Boundary Permeability
223 Rushware
225 Satisfice
226 Schizophrenia
227 Science Fiction as Future
228 Second Self
230 Second-Hand Cyborg
231 Sentient Computing
233 Service Design
234 Sharecropping
235 Sighborg
237 Simultaneous Time
238 Skeuomorph
240 Skitzovision
242 Sludgeware
243 Social Gravity
244 Social Punctuation
246 Software
247 Sousveillance
248 Stealth Socialization
249 Steve Mann
250 Superhuman Interaction Design
251 Supermodernity
253 Superorganism
255 Swarm Culture
256 Synchronous communication
259 Synesthesia
260 Tabaholic
262 Tamagotchi
263 Technosocial Womb
265 Technosocial Worm Hole
266 Tele-Cocooning
267 Teleoperator
270 Templated Self
271 Temporarily negotiated space
274 The Community Cyborg
275 The Cyborg Handbook
276 Time Geography
277 Totem group
279 Uncanny Valley
281 Unitasking
284 Virtual Companion
285 Virtual Tombstone
287 Wearable Computing
288 Whole earth catalog
294
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